poetry (v2) – a haiku

on

my honeybee path
this hive entranced waggle-dance
bee friends may follow

A. H (27th April 2020 & v2 18th April 2021)

A slight rewrite not just a reblog this time. The original is here – https://ablindcatchinthesun.com/2020/05/03/poetry-a-haiku/

I did try a bigger rewrite, switching 1st and third lines and changing words and syntax a little, but it lost some charm. And may gain it being put back but with myself owning it more.

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